Wednesday, July 1, 2015

MMC (6/24/15)

I wrote this for Monday's Minute Challenge about a week ago, but I didn't post it for quiet a while because I was trying to get the word count down to 300. I didn't succeed, but I'm going to post it anyway. I hope you like it and please note it was better before I had to take some of the descriptions and such out of it to lower the word count. :)
 
 
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Her bright red cape stood out in even in the darkness of the night as she moved swiftly over the bridge, glancing around with each step she took. Please be here. I can’t wait. She pleaded inwardly, the changing shadows alerting her to how long she had been gone.  She tried to run, but the basket in her arms prohibited her from really doing so.
There stood the tree marking their greeting place, but no Freda waited there.
She sank to her knees, exhausted and disheartened, under the tree’s leafy branches. She couldn’t hide her baby’s existence for one more day.
Lifting the blanket from the bundle in the basket, she stared into her baby’s blue eyes, the same color as the ribbon on her booties.
“What are we going to do?” she whispered.
The baby didn’t seem overly concerned over her fate; she kicked a chubby little leg and gurgled.
But her mother couldn’t afford to waste another moment waiting for her friend. She had to get back, and she had to get back now.
An idea struck her, and she leapt to her feet, her searching eyes falling on a small stick a few paces away. She retrieved it and again bent down next to her little girl.
Putting both hands on the stick, she painstakingly began to move it through the clay-like earth, her thin arms shaking with the effort of the simple task.
Soon, she stood up, glancing down at her work. With a small nod, she picked up her baby, kissing her forehead and whispering words of love in her little ears.
Then, tears streaming down her cheeks, she replaced her in the basket, tucking the blanket securely under her chin.
And walked away.
When Freda appeared a half an hour later, she was greeted by the baby and a simple word written in the earth.
TAHLIA

312 words. I used the items prompt.
 
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8 comments:

  1. wow! I love that! You should totally make something out of that..that's a great beginning to a story! :D Your writing is wonderful! <3

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    1. Aww thanks, Sarah Margaret! That means so much, especially coming from you. :) You're a great writer yourself!

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  2. This is great! Well done Christine! :)

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    1. Thank you so much, Simi! I really appreciate your frequent comments on my blog, and I promise, I do read your posts. I just am weird about commenting about books I haven't seen. But you do a wonderful job with your reviews!

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  3. Excellent writing, Sister! :d Keep on fashioning magic. (h)

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  4. This so so amazing! You are an awesome writer! <3

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    1. Aww thank you, Clara! You are an amazing writer, too. :)

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